My first pictures. How can i improve?

[TWINKLE TIPS]

Hi, These are my first posts and about the 6th time I've had a practice on myself. I was wondering if anyone could give me any feed back/tips? I know they arn't perfect, infact i'm not even close to being happy with them.
I've used Millennium clear tips and The Edge L&P.
Would be grateful for any feedback.
Thanks