Website critique, please?

[Flapjack]

Hi,

I have one website already for all my beauty therapy treatments and wanted to do another one that just concentrated on makeup.

I have just finished doing the website and wanted to ask if possible for some feedback? is there any information I should have included? or something that doesnt look very good?

Home - tracydaviesmakeup

Any advice would be great.

Thanks

Tracy
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[Flapjack]

anyone?

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[syncage]

The forums are generally quiet at this time of day (people picking kiddiwinks up from school?!) I had a quick look but I'm not a makeup artist so can't say what you need to include/not include but I did get married last month so I guess I would have been your target audience at one point!

I would maybe include a testimonials page with comments from some of your brides (hopefully you have some thankyou cards with these in!) saying how lovely you are as a person and how you did just what they wanted etc! That always helps when choosing a wedding supplier.

I did spot a typo on your prices page . *Strip lashes

Although you have stated in 'About Me' which areas you cover I would make more of an emphasis of that as it isn't immediately obvious and also it will help in your search rankings when people google Make Up Artist Southend etc.

I personally would also like to know more about your makeup style and ethos and what brands you use - professional/specialist/mineral etc.

 

[mollie1985]

Hiya I agree with above and also I would make the pricing page more clearer you have a list then you scroll down to a list of prices so straight away to me I didn't know what the prices where for so would put the prices next to it,your work looks great x

 

[Flapjack]

The forums are generally quiet at this time of day (people picking kiddiwinks up from school?!) I had a quick look but I'm not a makeup artist so can't say what you need to include/not include but I did get married last month so I guess I would have been your target audience at one point!

I would maybe include a testimonials page with comments from some of your brides (hopefully you have some thankyou cards with these in!) saying how lovely you are as a person and how you did just what they wanted etc! That always helps when choosing a wedding supplier.

I did spot a typo on your prices page . *Strip lashes

Although you have stated in 'About Me' which areas you cover I would make more of an emphasis of that as it isn't immediately obvious and also it will help in your search rankings when people google Make Up Artist Southend etc.

I personally would also like to know more about your makeup style and ethos and what brands you use - professional/specialist/mineral etc.

Hi,

Thanks for your feedback, ill sort out the typo. And make the changes that you have suggested as that all makes perfect sense.

Thanks
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[Desi Chick]

I would make the images on the home page into links to the relevant pages.


* Please make sure all make up is removed before I arrived to do your makeover*

correct - makeup and arrive.

Desi Chick
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[Flapjack]

I would make the images on the home page into links to the relevant pages.


* Please make sure all make up is removed before I arrived to do your makeover*

correct - makeup and arrive.

Desi Chick
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Thanks, yes I may change that bit on the front as not sure I like it but cant think what to do with the main page yet. T
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[Flapjack]

Hiya I agree with above and also I would make the pricing page more clearer you have a list then you scroll down to a list of prices so straight away to me I didn't know what the prices where for so would put the prices next to it,your work looks great x

Hi

The pricing doesnt appear underneath on a laptop. Unfortunately some phones do make the contents of websites appear different, I wont be able to change that which is ashame, but people will have to get on their computers instead lol!

T
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[Flapjack]

I have changed my site a bit now does it look better?

 

[Jack Shaw]

I have changed my site a bit now does it look better?

Visually much better, the content needs sorting a little, just got to bath and bed the nipper so will give you more pointers in an hour or so.

 

[Flapjack]

Visually much better, the content needs sorting a little, just got to bath and bed the nipper so will give you more pointers in an hour or so.

Ok thanks look forward to seeing your feedback.

Thanks
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[blossom]

I love your website, it's colourful and friendly with lots of gorgeous photos and if I was looking for a make-up artist I think I would call you. Really nice layout and easy to use/understand.


Now for my comments which are a bit pedantic but please excuse this as I am a trained proof-reader and just think the following amendments would perfect your site (but then I do have a thing for grammar and punctuation lol). I just know that if I find a website with grammatical errors or spelling mistakes it loses a bit of credibility with me and just doesn't seem as professional. So here goes:-




The paragraph about where you did your training isn't a complete sentence, it would roll off the tongue better if it said for example "I did my make up training at....."



Would love to see a colon in the paragraph about where you cover, ie

I cover the following locations:



On their products/website it is written bareMinerals . . . not Bare minerals? Your decision though obviously.


On the prices page, there should be a comma following the words "glamorous look you're after".


On the contact page, the word "me" should not have a capital letter.


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[nicole333]

Ok thanks look forward to seeing your feedback.

Thanks
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Jack will give you really constructive feedback, that will make you see things from a different angle.

I made changes to mine after some chats with him, and I am happier with it.

 

[Salzgirlie]

Jack will give you really constructive feedback, that will make you see things from a different angle.

I made changes to mine after some chats with him, and I am happier with it.

I am with Nicole. Jack gave me some really good feedback. Long and short of it is I now have him designing a website for me and he has been brill so far. The man knows his stuff.

Good luck xx

 

[Jack Shaw]

Hi

Sorry forgot to get back to you, I blame Derren Brown terrorising some poor lads mind

Anyway, the content of your site

and before you ask I have LS for your area and put the first letters of your name as I dont want Salon Geek to out rank you on Google...because it will

1. The title of the page you are using is "Home - tdmakeup" use something like
"Bridal Make up LS - TD - Home" or "Make up Artist LS - TD - Home"

2.Your Description is "Professional Makeup artist based in LS, covering this area and surrounding locations"
change this to something like:-
Professional Make Up artist that knows your look is as important as what you are.

3.The top left of yout site, logo or Main Heading says "T D Make Up"
Again you need to change this to something that people will search for
"Instead of T D use "Make Up Artist/Bridal Make Up artist" then T D. basically you have you name not your business sector in your main h1 tag

4.Your content, you would do pretty well in the search engines if someone searched T Make Up artist.
I keep mentioning to others but you are making the same mistake as many, you are writing about you and not the services you offer the solutions to the problem and the benefits of your solution.

Sell your business/services to me, not you, If i want to know about you I will look on the About page.

I am not going to mention any of your competitors names, but there is one who ranks well on google and her write up is almost bang on.
If you want I will pm who it is