Hi,
I've written quite a comprehensive list of mistakes. Can you tell I'm a primary teacher? LOL However, I really love the site and it all looks very exciting and fun. I'd be very impressed if I was a parent loking to have a party. You've really covered a lot. Going for weddings etc is a great idea too. I've been really picky in pointing out errors, but if it's worth doing, it's worth doing well. Don't take it as critisism, as the site is easy to navigate, colours are great, and it's full of information.
I'd add some pictures of parties in full swing once you get going. However, watch you have parent's written permission to put their children's pictures on the internet. It might be easier to "stage it" with your own children. If you are doing this, take the pictures where the children's faces are obscured/ turned away so they cannot be identified and don't put any children's names on the site. You never know who is looking and you don't want to give out details of your children where people can find out your address.
love the colour and pattern as the site opens up.
Home page - get rid of the little smiley sitting there all by himself, looks tagged on and out of place.
Our team page - should be "Hi, my name's Amy/Lisa"
I'm a qualified Nail Technician;
and I'm a qualified Nursery Nurse and an Ofsted approved child minder; (there are semi colons on these two lines, but not the following ones. Either put them on every line or remove these. I'd just remove them as I think it would look too messy on every line.)
Cache Diploma in child care and education Level 3 (should this be Creche?)
Introduction to child minding practice certificate Child Minding Practice Certificate (capitals)
I'm a talented artist and do child's face painting. children's face painting
The photos look messy. Make sure you are against a wall with no door frame/ items visible.
Girls' parties page
Girl's Party's should be Girls' Parties
All party's include age appropriate traditional party games. should be All parties
Boys' parties page
Boy's Party's should be Boys' parties
All party's include age appropriate traditional party games. should be All parties
In the football themed party the "Including our planet nosh" on the second line seems to have a space before it as it is out of line with the one on the line above it. (Picky I know, but you want it to be perfect!)
Argh! Pirate themed party - I would make it Arrgh! as I think that is more of a pirate noise, whereas argh sounds more like a scream LOL
Camouflage filled party bags & a Army birthday cake should be and an Army birthday cake
Under 5 page
Under five's Party's should be Under fives' Parties
All party's include age appropriate traditional party games. should be All parties
something small for each child participating, in our experience should be with a full stop ie something small for each child participating. In our experience.....
*Adults expected to stay I would make it *Adults are required to stay
Planet nosh page
When clicking to see the part bag designs, the text is all muddled if the window opened is too small to allow the whole line of bags to be put on the one row (make your window narrower to see what I mean). I don't know if this can be cahanged by somehow linking the text to the box picture?
Package one heading shows up away on the right hand side on my computer.
I feel you need to separate the different packages better. I really like the text you use and it stands out well, but it almost looks as though it belongs to the previous package. Can you separate it with more space from the previous one, make your separation line longer, or join your heading on to the prices box?
FAQ page
I was planning on making my own birthday cake but I noticed you offer birthday cakes as part of your party themes can I use my own instead? should be two sentences ".....as part of your party themes. Can I use....."
Well it's up to you! You can either have two birthday cakes (probably a good idea if your having a large party anyway) or we can deduct the cake & £6 from your final bill.
Well, it's up to you........a good idea if you're.....or we won't supply the cake and will deduct £6......
Do you do unisex parties? should be mixed sex parties
This depends allot on location, size of hall required & whether it's a weekday or weekend however the average is around £15 per hour.
This depends a lot ........or weekend. However, the .........
trust us your carpets will appreciate it! trust us, your.....
Both the girl's Totally Pink Party and the boy's Cool Blue themed party can be subsisted for most other colours please enquire for more information.
Both the girls' ......the boys'......can be changed to most other colours. Please......
How long will my party last?
Party's normally Parties normally.....
I've got less than 10 children coming can we still have a party?
YES! Our prices start at 10 children so you will be charged as if 10 children were present however anything not used (i.e. party bags, hats, noisemakers etc) will be yours to keep!
I've got fewer than.......coming. Can we......
YES! Our prices start at 10 children, so.......were present. However, anything.....
It depends! If your child is very shy they may not want to be, if not we will of course make sure they are spoilt rotten we will discuss all this with you at the time of booking
....want to be. If not, we.........rotten. We will.... and take out the smiley
There is an extra blank line under this answer.
0-2 years parties) however if your having 0-2 years parties). However, if you're having
keep them bopping! take out the smiley
We have a portfolio of all our available party's and parties
Our team members our Amy & Lisa. Our team members are....
The deposit can be paid for by cheque, cash ......paid by cheque....
my friends bringing her baby do I have to pay for the baby to come too?
NO! If your friend/s (or you!) has a very young baby that won't be participating in the
my friend is bringing her baby. Do I......
If your friend (or you!) has
grazing at the buffet, you may need a larger spread.
...buffet. You may..... Take out the smiley in this answer too
Venues page
If you want to hire a hall heres a ........a hall, here's a
(Particularly like this very comprehensive list - good time saving for parents having to find out where they can hire, and the phone numbers)
.....and finally! You've made a really good looking website. Congratualations to you! Get in touch if you want any further clarification of my ideas/grammar, etc
Best of luck to both of you in your venture!
Marion xx
) spare time to boost our incomes and give us a bit of variation. We have both worked in childcare so plenty of experince. 
